I was flying in the air when I saw these plants in the ground. I went down to see if there was any seeds from the plants, when I saw this human. I didn’t think of anything at first until it didn’t move for a while. Then I flew down and I realised that it wasn’t a human, it was a statue. So I landed on its arms and looked to see if there was any seeds in the soil. There was so I went to get some and then a human walked out of the door so I hid in a tree and never went back again.
Hello Kayla,
What an interesting idea it was to tell your story through the eyes of a hungry bird. It added a different perspective to your story compared to what a human might have thought. Well done.
One tip when writing, try not to use “then” or “so” to start sentences. Your sentences worked very well without them.
Keep writing! I like your creative ideas.
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia